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« Reply #1 on: 02:25:55 PM 12/24/17 »
This is wonderfully cavalier and morbid and irreverent, I love it!! Do you have a follow up planned? Maybe from the point of view of his split consciousness between the worms? Does his 'personality' degenerate as the amount of worms grows and splits?

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« Reply #2 on: 01:52:15 PM 12/26/17 »
Characters like this narrator are ones I will never get tired of. I love the amount of detail in their plan and how dedicated they are to it, yet there is that obvious desperation to justify their reason for wanting to 'live on' after death. This is so creepy but also very entertaining and well thought-out, very awesome story!

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« Reply #3 on: 10:47:18 PM 12/26/17 »
Thanks to you two for reading and taking the time to comment! I appreciate it. To RedSleeves, I had originally hoped to expand on the story a little bit, like maybe in the form of a journal detailing the degeneration of the narrator's mind et-cetera. But I wasn;t sure if I was up to the challenge of writing it and doing it justice.
I'm glad to hear that the comedy of this story was apparent. That's mostly what I was going for. Thanks again for reading :)
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« Reply #4 on: 02:42:55 PM 01/01/18 »
What a delightfully macabre story. I really like the wanted ad structure and the voice of the narrator who lays out this disturbing plan (it's for science!) in such a calm matter of fact way. I think it's the determination that gets me the most. It's clear that there is no straying from the path on this venture.

If you were ever to do a follow up, an idea could be from the point of view of the person or persons who carried out the authors wishes. I think as long as you kept the same premis, taking something mundane and injecting the creep factor, it would deffinately pay off.

Good stuff.
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