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Posted by Person Mc Realhuman on: 10:48 PM, 03/19/19
(So I don't really know if its OK to post the same story to multiple boards, so if it isn't tell me and ill take this down.)

“Let's review what happened yesterday, and see if we can put the pieces back together”

Letting out a slow yawn, I start to wake up.

“No, I'm pretty sure I'm you from five minutes ago.”

Something felt off, I thought to myself

“Why do you feel strange?”

Rolling down the stairs, I land face first onto the  concrete.

Slowly, I open my eyes.

“You sure?”

“I feel strange”

My eyes drifted to the alarm clock, and I did a double take.

“Okay, let's try that. Not like we have much to lose.”

I spring out of bed, rapidly getting dressed and running out the door.

Something was…off…

“I don't know man, I thought you would know what to do!”

What year is it?

 It was one PM!

“oh, shit.”

As I'm going down the front steps, I slip on a patch of ice.

 I scrabble to my feet, and get into the car,

 “Why would I know what to do?”

My boss was pissed, as expected.

I kill a few hours of my life at work, and head back home.

“...Yes, That IS strange, isn't it?”

“Okay, I have an idea.”

“Something has gone wrong with time.”

The fall had knocked the wind out of me.

After watching some TV, I fall asleep.

“What's the idea?”

“Aren't you me from the future? I thought we would have worked this all out by then.”

“Well, what should we do?”

« Last Edit: 10:54 PM, 03/19/19 by Person Mc Realhuman »

Posted by Squidmanescape on: 01:54 PM, 08/19/20
If I understand correctly, there are two people commenting as one person goes through a day.

I find the story confusing because it's difficult to distinguish between these two. If you want to fix this, I suggest italics. If you don't, then I don't have any more criticism.


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